ornery's art Reviews on Newgrounds

[Rise in the Sunlight]

Not impressed

Taking a rather poor drawing and then photographing it poorly to make it look a bit better through color and arbitrarily cast shadows doesnt convice me that you have any actual artistic skills.

All it says is that you are a miserable photographer and need desperate help with photographing your work.

Poor photo quality aside the drawing is weak, appears to have taken 15 minutes, does nothing to show that you understand line weight (crucial for such a linear drawing) and having the imprint of notes taken on the pages preceding it is just downright sloppy.

GobyGuitar responds:

hhhhh man chill out...
did i kill one of your family members by mistake or smthn ??
i mean this thing was meant to be simple i drew it in the class ...and took the photo with my 1.3 mp phone camera , its not like i have a 9023mp camera hidden in my pocket lol ....
[and btw i ddnt color it or add shadows on the PC thats the photo as it is]
i checked ur profile and am just gonna take a guess and say u have been drawing for a long time and its more than a hoppy for u ,,but did u start drawing frkn angels out of the sudden o.O''
every one starts some where ...
but thx 4 the comment any way

[Lion]

Weakest of your animals.

This one seems much more binary as far as the shading goes, and by that i mean two toned. The picture is either black or white, and this flattens it out. Also the crispness that the others thrived on this lacks which makes the charcoal handeling seem sloppy and lack of a definite focal point makes the viewer lose their attention faster.

On the plus side the composition of this one is much stronger, with more intelligently placed subject rather than the typical horseshoe or dead center format that so many other pictures rely upon.

MoriChax responds:

Yeah I got a little lazy with the charcoal on this one, furs a beach.
But thank you for your critique. Im always happier when I get one thats constructive, I wish more people would do it.

[Belly Dancer]

Needs work

First I would like to say, invest in some better paper. The paper you are working on for this technique and media is grossly inappropriate and is making your work suffer.

Second, I can tell you are pretty heavy handed, based on this and your other works. This is hurting your control of the material. Work slower, with lighter strokes, especially when you are working with wet mediums. Layering works better and has much more satisfying results than just dunking a brush in water and smearing it about. Try dry brushing some stuff, or using a brush with barely any water and note the effects they give, it might help solidify your piece instead of making it look messy and overly washed.

Finally, the composition is much better in this than some of your other pieces, you do a decent job of moving the eye around the piece due to the pose and appropriate amounts of objects outside of the figure.

[Reginald T. Rex]

Good concept, poor execution,

I'm liking the idea and overall imagery, but the actual quality of the art work and craftsmanship falls short.

Originality and zaniness are always applauded in my book, but this could be so much stronger if the material was handled better.

The paint feels thin and washed out, not in a good way. The details are muddy, even from a distance. With paint its acceptable for details to disappear when the piece is viewed up close, but this one loses them from the first glance and never gets them back.

Colors seem a bit arbitrary as well. Things are colored based solely on their actual color instead of a perceived color, where light, air and reflective qualities would be playing a part. To paint a t-rex green, the sky blue, a tuxedo black, etc. is just basic. Each should have a tiny bit of the others mixed into them for unification purposes in a stronger piece.

Valiant effort, but needs improving.

[Fuck yeah!]

This thing is my new motivational poster

makes me so happy and awesome.

SirReginald responds:

It's meant to inspire

[volcano]

Pretty

The clouds/smoke are really well done. Great execution on them. However their spectacular detail is hindered slightly by the rougher less addressed areas around them (ie. side of volcano and lower trees).

[Cubist Portrait of Ninja]

A bit too white

I love white, and white on white drawings always have a soft spot with me, but this one is too light. The details aren't intricate enough to warrant the effort put into seeing the actual image. The shapes are too broad and large and make it difficult to really distinguish anything worth while. The paleness of the colors doesn't help either because they don't seem to make any actual sense. Even if they were saturated. I think working with more muted, not just lightened colors would lend itself better to an ephemeral piece. Good effort though trying something that most are afraid to do.

J-qb responds:

Thanks. I agree with all your points. A lot of this was just practicing new stuff, like you said doing stuff others might be afraid to do. I sacrificed some esthetics in sake of the techniques etc. Thanks for the thought out review!.

[Iket]

Hmmm

yeah i dont think that sword is big enough, she can still lift it...

[Nude Model #3]

Them knees be low

He almost looks like some sort of cross between a horse and a guy in the leg area due to his knees being so low in his leg.